Dream Deep

A critique? No worries at all, DD. ^_^'' Any brief remark is fine as well, You've been busy enough as it is. ^_~ (Livny, Shan...deadlines. #_#) ...That really doesn't mean ...

Just a really quick comment, Dynamo, because I've gotta run shortly: you want to watch your tenses. It's a pretty noticeable problem where it occurs because it disrupts the flow ...

I printed it out, Myth, so I'll get you a crit written up over the weekend! ^_^ I figure you deserve a nice hefty one, in return for the fine ...

Short and sweet, Pheonixfire. Very nively done, but perhaps one thing to look at... Breathing out And breathing in The world is ever, Ever turning On this water-world we spin ...

That's what you think... :wink: I await eagerly as always the next installment (the desperation scene, no?) and if you find yourself in need of a long crit/suggestions, feel free ...

I read it through, Clover, and I really would like to give you a long crit on this. ^_^ It really drew me in. So! I'll get to work in ...

Sureal was dropped as a child... many times... down an elevator shaft... pitched, actually. ^_^ Lol, you're weird, dude. :wink: But that was amusing, with flippant use of the bullets. ...

Whee! Compound Brazil is up! But the ending's mine, you cheater. :wink: Okay, anyway... a lot better on the lengthening out the drama. But perhaps a little simplistic in ways... ...

David... you missed the virtual soap bit. ^_^ Shhh.... be discrete. Or run. Works quite well, actually. :wink: I think it's more like genius masquerading as non-genius masquerading as genius... ...

Hilarious... ^_^ ... In a very [s]strange[/s] weird way. But funny to read. And lol, don't dis the ninjas. Or rather - dis the ninjas all you like, but you ...

Space, Pros, space! Ach! *strains eyes* Adam's right, you really do have to space this out... And lol, a bit mroe drama might be useful here too, a bit more ...

You could make a novel out of it! :wink: I mean, I know you have "Eos Quo" that connects to this and ... lol, whatever the other one was, but ...

Great job! Heh, I kept going through saying 'this one's my favorite stanza... no, this one'. Not too profound and lyrical, but nice nontheless. Good job! :wink:

Thia was great, Wiggy. ^_^ I can see why they accepted it. Congratulations. :wink: But lol, you should have read the fine print about the righte before you queried... ^_~

Lol, I love you Bjorn. :wink: "Don't look at Stalinism - look at Marxism!" Hmmm... I do have to agree with you there, however, even what most people consider the ...